The Painful Process Of Veterans Services: BASED ON A TRUE STORY!!! Name and situation changed for fear of retribution, but response by VETERANS SERVICE’S is actual!!!

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Theo was a great dad of four, Ronny, Johnny, Mariah and Sally. His was married to his dream-girl, Maddie. They met in high school during a biology test, he was trying to cheat, by look on her paper for an answer, she covered her paper. However in college, she heard him telling a friend about his cheating and a encounter turned in to a whirlwind romance.

Theo struggled in college as much as he did in high school and made a deal with Maddie, that if he dropped out, and joined the military, he would return and finish when things in their life settled.

Before he went to basic, they got married, Maddie stayed in school, and while he finished training and got his permanent duty station, she finished college, getting her degree in accounting. She agreed to forgo her career aspiration to become, a “stay at home mom.” because they knew it would be easier on the family. Over the years he really became a great provider, and Maddie and the kids really relaxed into a nice pattern of family life. Image result for american family

His transition from the military to civilian life was almost seamless, because he lucky enough to become a Army General Assistant, so his family and kids never, had to move, and his kid never had the difficulty of transferring to new schools. This gave them the opportunity plant roots and be a part of one community. Theo, or Sergeant Brown had a great life while in the military, because out of training he moved to Washington D.C. got married, had kids and they are still here in D.C. with the same friends and same life.

The luck never stopped, because one day while eating lunch at the motor pool, a couple of jeep driver was talking about getting out of the military. Theo over heard them saying, “that the local Ford Plant is hiring and starting pay was 45.80 an hour.” He quickly called his wife to talk to her about this opportunity, because his ETS (end term of service) date was in two month’s. So she told him to go for it, and he started at the plant, a week after he left the service. How lucky can one man be?Image result for Factory

Waking up to the sound of the alarm, in the five o’clock darkness, is just like any other day for Theo, waking up to a beautiful, intelligent, loving wife, four great kids, and a great paying job at the “Ford Plant”, thinking to himself:”Wow, what a great life.” He jumped right up, got dressed, and out the door.

Most mornings he would listen to some talk radio, and pick up his black coffee with four sugars from Duncan’s Muffin Cafe, and maybe a muffin or two, but today was different because it’s been a down year for the plant, and “people just weren’t buying any, new car’s”, he thought. Thinking about the economy, he started feeling very worried and he really scared, because their was also talks of the “D” word “downsizing”, and he really need his job. Thinking back, he felt fortunate, because right out of the military, this great job just fell in his hands, He was the envy of all of military friend. He said to himself “This can’t be the end”, thinking to himself, and turning up on the radio, to take his mind off of the negative thoughts!!!

Arriving to work early, turning on his machine to “drown-out” the quiet whispers, he focus on doing a harder and better job. Then “The Announce” it came over the company speaker system piercing the ominous noise-less warehouse, :”all worker with less than 4 years, report to the cafeteria at twelve o’clock, for a company briefing.” Theo looked at the clock, and realizing he has be with the company for fourteen month’s, and now his fear impending doom.

The clock said: “11:45” and every second that ticked away, made his heart thump harder and harder, he couldn’t concentrate on his job. The twelve o’clock horn, rang so loudly, he almost jump out of his over-all’s. He turn off his machine, turned to walk the long dreadful steps to the cafeteria, praying and hopeing that his fears aren’t true, because if they are,what will he do?

The cafeteria was packed with worried and anxious worker, few talking, mostly quiet, and no one looking at each other.

The cafeteria had two sections: The eating area which room was filled with table all aligned against the wall, in the front of the room was a wall with two entry ways, inside of the doorways was the food preparation and display area. The eating area was where all the workers lined up, because in front of the tables area was a stage.Image result for cafeteria

Moment after Theo arrived, Mr. Abram appeared on the stage, standing in front up a podium with a microphone sticking out of it, he open with: “First of all I like to thank you for giving me your time and attention, from you busy work schedule, I brought you together with a heavy heart to talk about the Ford Company and our place and position in the auto industry.” Today I was in a meeting, with all the Vice Presidents and there is talk about about: layoffs, downsizing, and cutting hours, and I brought you here to let you know that your job’s are safe, at least for the next 90 days, and then it will be more talks, I assure you that this is a just hiccup, and hopefully soon we will be back on track.”So don’t panic we have your best interest in mind.

Now I will answer any questions you might have… Theo walk away sweating and in shock: thinking to himself, “What will my family do without my income?” “Roarrrrrrrr,” the lunch horn sounds, Theo, didn’t feel like eating.

He just grabbed the phone and call his wife, when she got on the phone, she said “Hello” he just started talk saying, “baby, they called a meeting before lunch, talking about: downsizing, layoffs, and cutting hour’s”…. Maddie interrupted “is it immediate? or how much time before this will happen?” Theo responds “He said 90 days” Maddie asked “Who said?” Theo Answered “Mr. Abram.” Maddie jumped in, “Who is he?” Theo said “The Director Of Operations.” They finished talking, Theo was scared, Maddie listened carefully and caringly to calm her husband. He hangs up the phone, takes a breath to calm himself, and head back to work.

The rest of the day, was very quiet and fear filled on the entire work place. Theo was worry, but he was not too scared, because he still had 90 days before he would have to make a decision. Leaving work, he would normally go for a drink, today was not normal so he went straight home.

Walking in the house, his wife met him at the door, she sent the kids to their grands house, so they could talk with no interruptions. They sat-down for dinner and a long talk, Maddie starts the very emotional conversation with: “I’d like to say, I am proud of the way you have provided for our family, Theo, we’ve been married for 15 years, and we haven’t had a need that your hard work at providing hasn’t fulfilled.” “Also I am here today to listen to anything you have to say, for a person, you to bounce ideas off of and workout a plan to weather this family storm. “Theo in tears, says, I do know what to do, I’ve done everything right and I JUST DON’T KNOW WHAT TO DO???” And sobs himself to sleep!!!

The next morning, at 4:30 the phone ring, half sleep and anger Theo, picks up the receiver, a voice says: “Hello Theo? Theo sits up wondering who was calling, say “yes?” the caller said: “This is Mary Smith from Ford, Human Resources, I called to say, that the plant is closed, and you will receiver a letter by UPS later today by mail explaining, what happened and any further action you can take, also the letter will explain whatever, I didn’t in this phone call.” She said, “Goodbye” and phone went dead, Theo tryed to call back and all he got was a busy signal.

Maddie said “Theo, who was that? Theo turned and told his wife what transpired over the phone. Four hours later the mailman brings the letter that his company said he would be delivered, Maddie was outraged saying: “that they had to have planned the plant closing weeks ago for the letters to arrive in four hours of that “terrible” phone call.” The letter read:                                                                     Image result for mail

Dear: Theodore Brown

We are sad and disappointed that our economy, has put our company in the position to close our plant, at such an inconvenient time. Enclosed: in a severance package that includes: three months pay, six month medical and dental package.

Thank you for your service, to our company, We hope you future employment opportunitie are pleasant!!!

Mr. Allen Abram

Director Of Operations

Ford Company

It was the single most tragic letter and event of his life. Theo sunk into a deep depression, feeling sorry, and a couple of week’s of why me, but go up one Monday and said Now it’s time for job searching.

He called this phase one: it involved working very hard at his job search, creating a new resume, cover letter, and looking at YOUTube video, “how to win the interview.” Maddie is very proud of his rebound from, disappointment and depression to encouraged and hard line job searcher. However the clock is ticking and its a week at two month’s till doomsday!!!, and no more money.

Money was coming to the end and Maddie, asked Theo how was his job search going, he gave her the bleak details, so they talked about phase two, which involved: Veteran Service, Unemployment Service, and Welfare Services.

Theo hit phase two with the same vigor and heart as he did with phase one. Monday morning 7:00 a.m. the alarm rang and Theo hit the floor like the soldier he was and setting up his plan of attack, getting all of his paperwork ready to answer question, and see how Veteran Service’s will help him, while fully involved in his job search. He was desperate, all of his options were used up and all of his bank accounts were depleted, He used his cellphone: Google’s Maps app, got the address and was his way.                Image result for veteran affairs

Entering Veteran Service’s, Theo felt a faint Military familiarity, because of the strict-to-the-letter adornment of the buliding and it’s office’s. As walking in, he had to stop at a desk where an officer and a walk through scanner was, it was manned by a officer in a security uniform and name tag with “Smith”, Officer Smith instructed him to put: all metals in the tray and walk through the scanner, after being scanned he was instructed to take his metals, and walk to the receptionist.

The receptionist was a pretty blonde, women in a business suit and also had a gold name tag, with “Harris” on it, and she said “hello, can I help you.” Theo respond: “Yes my name is Theodore Brown and I’m a veteran…, Ms Harris interrupted, “do you have a DD 214,” he answers “yes” and handed it to her. Theo continued, I have lost my job and I here to see if I can get some help,” Ms. Harris took some more intake information, and handing him a writing board, asked him to fill out the intake paperwork, instructing him to the “visitors chairs.”                                                                                                  Image result for visitors chairs

He read over the paperwork while writing all of his personal information, throughout the entire set up form, after he finished, he took the forms back to the receptionist window. She said, “Thank you and said an “intake specialist” will be with you soon, so he went back to his seat and waited.

Ten minutes later, a heavy-set brunette women, comfortablely dresses in a flowery blue dress call from an open door “Mr. Theodore Brown” walking toward the voice, the heavy-set women instructed him to a open room filled with desk and chairs, across the deck was a chair in front, she instructing him to take a seat there.

She said “Hello Mr. Brown, I’m Ms. Johnson, your intake specialist, and I need to get further information, and set up an appointment to talk to a counselor. Theo responded with a question asking, I have to see a counselor, “yes,” “you will have to bring in additional paperwork so we can assess your need,” He end by saying “ok.” finishing his paper work, Ms. Johnson gave him a list of things to bring to his meeting with the counselor in three days Friday at 10:00 a.m. Mr. Mulligan.

Feeling good for the first time in a long time, he drove home in preparation of finishing the list. He told his wife Maddie, “I think that the meeting at the V. A. went well and we have weathered the storm.” Two days later he finally get his last piece of paperwork, and prepare for his ten o’clock appointment, feeling upbeat!!!

7am the alarm, rang, rising early was a habit for Theo, also he couldn’t wait for his meeting this morning, he takes a shower, shaves, dress in a nice shirt, and slacks, kiss his wife goodbye, Maddie says: “go gett’um tiger” he goes back to a old routine, Duncan Muffin Cafe: black coffee, four sugers and a muffin, and on his way to Veteran Service’s!!!

He arrives early in anticipation of a great outcome, goes into the building and same process of scanning, and waiting, at then Theo heard his name, “Mr. Theodore Brown?” He rose to his feet and walked toward the voice.

The man he encountered was a tall blond man in a dark blue suit, name tag read “Mr. Mulligan” he shook his hand and followed him into a small office filled with pictures on the walls and a large computer on the desk, pointing toward a seat Mr. Mulligan asked Theo to take a seat.                                                                 Image result for Meeting with a counselor

Mr. Mulligan was a short man and asked Theo for his paperwork, no welcome or brief explanation of how the day will transpire, just straight business. Mr. Mulligan asked “did you get all your paper work.” Theo said “yes” so he started typing and asking question, and more typing and more asking questions, after it was finished he look down his glasses at Theo, in a condescending way and said: “Sorry Mr. Brown, we can’t offer you any help, you made too much money in the last three month’s, and it seems that you have a surplus of 2000 dollars.” Theo responds: “That’s my house payment for this month!!!” Mr. Mulligan snapped back, Well, it’s not in your paper work and until this is resolved, we can’t help you. Finally saying: Sorry Sir!!! Will you sign right here? Theo asked, what am I signing? Mr. Mulligan said the assessment, “you can reapply in 30 days!!! Mr. Mulligan passes Theo a copy of the assessment and walking him out to the reception area!!!”

Feeling shocked a hurt and confused, Theo walked out thinking to himself, “they didn’t even ask for my morgage!!!” and “Now what am I going to do?” As he drives home, humiliated and broken!!!

Seeing his wife, Theo just sobbed, saying to her, “WHAT ARE WE GOING TO DO?” She asked him what happened and he told her the entire pain-filled process!!! She got angered and more angered the more he talked, finally she said: “You give all your time, energy, with a spotless record, and this is the thank, you get?” Maddie went straight to he computer found her Congressman’s email and mailing address and wrote this letter and ended with this:

Soldiers: are America’s minute men, called to battle, called to war, and called to serve by Their Country, by Their Family and Called by their God. To serve in a thankless position, that can and sometime will cause there death.

After all the pain, carnage, and sacrifice, they come home to work, and do their economical duty for their family. They ask for nothing more than, a way to finish out their lives in the freedom that they have provided. Believing that if they had a short coming, Their Country through Veteran Service would come in minute to their aid, and once again they are left in disrespectful and humiliating disgrace by this organization!!!”   Image result for soldier dress uniform

In Conclusion

Theo was not looking for a handout, he was looking for His sevice to be recognized and honored!!! And for VETERANS SERVICE’S to live out their motto: to “care for him who shall have borne the battle and for his widow, and his orphan.” A. Lincoln

However from the moment he walking into the door, he was set to the trajectory of a painful out come: They allowed him to pour out his pain and personal business of his failure or inability to provide for his families basic needs,on a needs application, he came early to the appointment because he was very desperate, and sat through and tolerated the smug, and condescending interview. Lastly walkout lower than he came in: with no opportunitie, no help and no options.

He said to himself: “They will never be there when you need them, and the workers will aways make you feel like “Oliver Twist and his bowl of grool,” its like after your hurting they are not as helpful as the welfare system or a homeless shelter!!! They don’t even, Remember that we gave our: time, our youth and almost our lives to them. And all I get is disrespect “THANKS FOR YOU SERVICES” no help, no action, just, “LIP SERVICE”!!!


The Sincerest Form of Flattery

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Jeremy and Zach have been playing pick up basketball together for five year, they weren’t on the same team or played at the same time, but they knew of each other. One day Zach was having problems with Algebra, and need a tutor, so he started asking around, he was directed to Molly by a friend, she was a great chose because she was a mutual friend of both the guy’s. When Zach saw Molly coming toward him he asked asked “Molly, do you know anyone that I could find to help me with my algebra, I’m really struggling.” Molly said, “Zach, didn’t you know that Jeremy is a wiz at math” “who?” said Zach, “Jeremy” said Molly, Zach questioning “the one that play’s basketball with me?” Molly said “yes” “OK” Zach continued “Well, Thanks, I’ll asking him to tutor me tomorrow.” both ended the conversation with “goodbyes!!!”

The next day, Zach was so eager to play pickup,to meet with his balling buddy Jeremy, he wanted to see if he could help with his math dilemma. When Zach saw Jeremy, he said “hey man, Molly said you’re great, in math,” Jeremy responded “yes I am.” and then Zach asked “I would like to see, if you can help me with, a homework assignment.” Finally Jeremy looked at Zach curiously, then said “OK let’s meet after the game,” Jeremy ran off to play another pickup game with a group of guy’s he just met.

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They became fast friends, they started going to pick-up together, hanging out together, it was like, when you saw Jeremy, you saw Zach, they were two peas in a pod. They were great together, they had the same two loves: basketball and college, but that was it, because Jeremy seem like he was good at everything: he was: a academic scholar, he was popular and well liked. Zach was the complete opposite: he was a bit of a slacker, and this attitude permeated every area of his life, and he really didn’t have a lot of friends. So having Jeremy as friend was great for Zach, Jeremy was truly a nice guy, because when he noticed some of Zach short coming, took him under his belt and helped.

Jeremy, took his time with his new friend, and when he noticed that he was struggling with something, Jeremy would show Zach the “ropes” like: how to dress, coordinate his clothes, polish his shoes, shave and trim his beard, take care of his car, and taught him alittle something on how to get the ladies. Lol

People started to say that Zach mirrored Jeremy, with all of his confidence, attitude, and cockiness. The problem is he didn’t actually have the substance of Jeremy:

This is called, Social Learning Theory                                  Image result for social learning theory

Social Learing Theory: Albert Bandura’s(1977) Social Learning Theory posits that people learn from one another, via observation, imitation, and modeling. The theory has often been called a bridge between behaviorist and cognitive learning theories because it encompasses attention, memory, and motivation.


Attention — various factors increase or decrease the amount of attention paid. Includes distinctiveness, affective valence, prevalence, complexity, functional value. One’s characteristics (e.g. sensory capacities, arousal level, perceptual set, past reinforcement) affect attention.

1. Retention — remembering what you paid attention to. Includes symbolic coding, mental images, cognitive organization, symbolic rehearsal, motor rehearsal

2. Reproduction — reproducing the image. Including physical capabilities, and self-observation of reproduction.

3. Motivation — having a good reason to imitate. Includes motives such as past (i.e. traditional behaviorism), promised (imagined incentives) and vicarious (seeing and recalling the reinforced model)

Can mimicking someone then increase rapport, liking, and a positive feeling about the mimicker? Yes, generally research points in that direction however there is parting words of caution.”

Here are two tips to consider:

1) Base the use of mimicry on the other person as well as the situation.

2) Keep in mind if you are purposely mimicking others during interactions, it can create a cognitive strain and thus contribute to stress leaking out nonverbally. This means your intentional attempts at rapport building, charisma, and being persuasive can actually backfire.

Jeff Thompson, Ph.D.

Looking closely, Zach showed signs of mirroring and or mimicking:

What are nonverbal examples of mirroring and mimicry?

It consists of a wide-ranging spectrum including, but not limited to dress, gestures, vocal pitch and tone, posture, distance, eye contact, distance between the other person, and body orientation.

Jeff Thompson, Ph.D.                                                                                                Image result for mirroring

Mirroring is the subconscious replication of another person’s nonverbal signals.[1] This concept takes place in everyday interactions, and often goes unnoticed by both the person enacting the mirroring behaviors as well as the individual who is being mirrored. The activation of mirror neurons takes place within the individual who begins to mirror another’s movements, and allows them a greater connection and understanding with the individual who they are mirroring, as well as allowing the individual who is being mirrored to feel a stronger connection with the other individual. Mirroring is distinct from conscious imitation under the premise that while the latter is a conscious, typically overt effort to copy another person, mirroring is subconsciously done during the act and often goes unnoticed.

Zach mirroring was not a problem because it helped with his popularity, it also helped with grooming, up-keep, and cleanliness. This is very normal because most people, model or mimic: parents, pastors, actors, policemen, fireman, ECT… For many different reasons, and its nothing wrong with this type behavior.

The only time it becomes a problem, is when it involves credentials, when a person pretend to be a doctor or a lawyer, without going to medical school or law school, that is fraud. And illegal: pretending to be something or someone you aren’t, can lead to all type of issue’s and even jail time. So take your time model and or mimic, mirror, your boss, mentor or hero, have fun, learning, picking up some pointers and grow into a person someone else want to learn to be!!! Remember: Imitation Is The Sincerest Form of Flattery.

“Say What?” Editing is not saying it over, it’s saying it better!!!

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Tommy said to himself: “hey, I been telling everyone that I was going to do this for years.” “Now that I lost my job and can’t find any place to work, and I’m here, I might as well go in.”

He opened the door, which read read: ” Welcome To Austin State University,” he asked around, to figure out where he need to go and a very cute 19 year old sophomore named Sarah, said from behind the counter, “May I Help You!!! Searching for the words to say Tommy said, “Where do I go to start college classes?” Sarah pointed, directing him to the desk lined in a row in front of the room, “over there to admissions.” She continued to ask, “do you have anymore questions?” Tommy said “no” and was on his way.

Looking around the large room, he saw all different types of desks with signs over them, and people asking question. People from all over the United States and around the world. As he approached the desk, another women is a professional black suit, with a brass name-tag reading: “Admissions Coordinator: Mary Smith” asks Tommy, “May I Help You” she a small but well astute women, very professional.

Tommy said “can I be honest?” Mary as said “of course,” he continues, I’ve never been to college and I always been intimidated by these building’s so I talked myself to come in today to see about taking classes…, “Don’t worry about it,” Mary interrupted, and seeing his apprehensive disposition Mary said, “Your in good hand” and “You’ve come to the right place,” “I can help you with the entire process,” as she cleared her desk.

With in two hours, he did an: admissions form finished, applied for financial aid form processed, got a lesson on how to register for classes, and got a campus map. “Miss Smith was wonderful he exclaimed,” feeling confident after leaving the administration building.

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Reading the pamphlets, books, looking through the map, took a couple of days and after two week, he gets his acceptance letter, his financial aid, and he registers for classes. After registering for classes, he was, on his way to buy books. It was an easy process thanks to MS. Smith, thinking to himself once again: “Wow, she really was a great big help.”

Looking through his University online account, he recognised his class schedule, and printed it out, and prepare for his first day of class.

1st class 8:00 am English, room 201,

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Consulting his map, and his on his way!!! Arriving to class early very eager to learn, to be a “college student,” smiling to himself. Unpacking his notebook, he listen to the lecture and the first assignment is, a three page paper about yourself, due in one week!!!

He panics saying: “I am thirty years old, and I haven’t written a paper, in at least twelve years.” not realizing, that he hadn’t written a college-leveled papers, ever. So he is now at the library, needing a quiet place to begin his autobiography paper. Lucky for him, he took only three classes this semester, and one is bowling.

Navigation a paper like this, is a huge undertakings, after a twelve year hiatus, but his not going to allow, this first class project, derail his dream of earning a degree!!! He open his sylibuss, reading the criteria for the paper: three page, double spaces, typed, correct grammar, and punctuation. Saying to himself, “I got it” So, he through everything he had into his paper, and about two hours, he finally ended it with at fine conclusion and a great quote.

The next day in class, while talking to some new found friend’s, he said “I’m finished with my three pages already.” another student name Kathy said “me too” then she asked “you want to read over my paper to see if it’s ok?” she continues as a nice gesture ” hey you want me to read over yours?” Tommy was a little apprehensive but said, “ok.”

Reading over Kathy’s paper, was like reading a great novel, it flowed so easily and natural and it was such an easy read, that he really enjoyed it. However, Kathy couldn’t say the same, Tommy’s paper had grammatical error, seem to lose focus, alot of run on sentences and no guotation marks on the guotation!!!

So when Kathy handed back Tommy his paper, she didn’t realize that she written the comment on the paper, until she saw them as Tommy read over his paper. Her face turned red as he look up with a look of a “gut punching” disappointment.

Kathy started with, “sorry” he stopped her and said, “wow, I knew it after I read the first paragraph of your paper.” “How can write like this? Tommy asked, lifting up her paper. Kathy responded, It a nice paper it just need proper editing. Tommy said “I thought I had to start over,” Kathy said “no, a proper editing will give you a nice paper, because you have some great idea’s

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Editing is what you begin doing as soon as you finish your first draft. You reread your draft to see, for example, whether the paper is well-organized, the transitions between paragraphs are smooth, and your evidence really backs up your argument. You can edit on several levels:


Have you done everything the assignment requires? Are the claims you make accurate? If it is required to do so, does your paper make an argument? Is the argument complete? Are all of your claims consistent? Have you supported each point with adequate evidence? Is all of the information in your paper relevant to the assignment and/or your overall writing goal? (For additional tips, see our handouts on understanding assignments and developing an argument.)

Overall structure

Does your paper have an appropriate introduction and conclusion? Is your thesis clearly stated in your introduction? Is it clear how each paragraph in the body of your paper is related to your thesis? Are the paragraphs arranged in a logical sequence? Have you made clear transitions between paragraphs? One way to check the structure of your paper is to make a reverse outline of the paper after you have written the first draft. (See our handouts on introductions, conclusions, thesis statements, and transitions.)

Structure within paragraphs

Does each paragraph have a clear topic sentence? Does each paragraph stick to one main idea? Are there any extraneous or missing sentences in any of your paragraphs? (See our handout on paragraph development.)


Have you defined any important terms that might be unclear to your reader? Is the meaning of each sentence clear? (One way to answer this question is to read your paper one sentence at a time, starting at the end and working backwards so that you will not unconsciously fill in content from previous sentences.) Is it clear what each pronoun (he, she, it, they, which, who, this, etc.) refers to? Have you chosen the proper words to express your ideas? Avoid using words you find in the thesaurus that aren’t part of your normal vocabulary; you may misuse them.


Have you used an appropriate tone (formal, informal, persuasive, etc.)? Is your use of gendered language (masculine and feminine pronouns like “he” or “she,” words like “fireman” that contain “man,” and words that some people incorrectly assume apply to only one gender—for example, some people assume “nurse” must refer to a woman) appropriate? Have you varied the length and structure of your sentences? Do you tends to use the passive voice too often? Does your writing contain a lot of unnecessary phrases like “there is,” “there are,” “due to the fact that,” etc.? Do you repeat a strong word (for example, a vivid main verb) unnecessarily? (For tips, see our handouts on style and gender-sensitive language.)


Have you appropriately cited quotes, paraphrases, and ideas you got from sources? Are your citations in the correct format? (See the UNC Libraries citation tutorial for more information.)

As you edit at all of these levels, you will usually make significant revisions to the content and wording of your paper. Keep an eye out for patterns of error; knowing what kinds of problems you tend to have will be helpful, especially if you are editing a large document like a thesis or dissertation. Once you have identified a pattern, you can develop techniques for spotting and correcting future instances of that pattern. For example, if you notice that you often discuss several distinct topics in each paragraph, you can go through your paper and underline the key words in each paragraph, then break the paragraphs up so that each one focuses on just one main idea.

After Editing his paper Tommy actual learned what editing is,”Editing involves looking at each sentence carefully, and making sure that it’s well designed and serves its purpose. Proofreading involves checking for grammatical and punctuation errors, spelling mistakes, etc. Proofing is the final stage of the writing process.

He also learned another amazing thing, that editing doesn’t take away from the basic idea of your paper, neither the thoughts of your paper, but it adds to it and allows others to understand your ideas the way you intended the paper to do!!!

That is why you should edit your paper till it’s right, for you, and your reader’s to enjoy!!!

Scammers Will Use Anything And Anyone

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Johnny Smith was on Facebook, perusing his new friends requests, always choosing the prettiest or the sexiest women. He would say to himself: I am the only man I need on my Facebook!!!”

While picking from all the perspective friends he came across a sexy black women sitting on a Mercedes Benze, and he says to himself once more, “yes, this looks like my type of young lady.” Quickly clicking on the image, when all of a sudden, she text back “Hello.” The conversation starts, it was going really smoothly, until.

The conversation move to a unusually strange dialog, (this chat is take from an actual texting interaction) “let’s Listen in”

Her text:

Have you heard the good news about  The  New Year Bonus Yet


No, what is it?

Her text:

is a Program to help Retired, Workers, deaf, Youth, Old and Disable financially with money all over the world to take care of kids, buy houses, pay rents and lots more i got $800,000.00 cash from them did you got yours from them yet?



Her text:

Because I saw your name on the list when my winning money was deliver to me at my door step I think you should contact the agent that is in charge of your winning cash did you have the agent contact info?



Her text:

Here is the agent text him (‬720) 464-8840 text him now regarding your winnings and tell him i told you i saw your name on the win list and  what did you need to do to claim your winning


Thank you

Her text:

You’re welcome

You have to text him NOW

Johnny feels scammed, and suspicious, but he didn’t want to be perceived, as obvious, so he just continued the conversation with,

“I WILL,” her next text was, “Ok Dear,changing the tone to intimate, then she texted “Let me know what he told you, and when the UPS are going to come down to your door step.” Finally Johnny texted “Goodbye.”

He felt uncomfortable, so he chose not text the number as prompted, because he knew, she was a con-artist, and  this was just a, internet scam:

Internet Scam: “is a general way to define the different types of fraud that consumers face when using the Internet. Scammers use technical tools or ‘social engineering’ techniques to compromise consumer’s personal information with different objectives, but normally with the intention of get consumer’s money.”

10 Most Common Scams

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1. Non-delivery of merchandise or non-payment for items sold: This scam takes a lot of forms, but it’s pretty easy to avoid becoming a victim. If buying merchandise online, use well-known merchants with a good reputation. And if you’re selling items, use escrow services and track any shipments you send to ensure they’re delivered.

2. FBI-related scams: Almost daily I receive emails from scammers posing as the FBI and claiming to have money that’s been recovered on my behalf. Just a hint: If the FBI has money that’s yours, it probably won’t send you an email—and FBI agents working on official business don’t use Yahoo, Gmail or Hotmail accounts.

3. Identity theft: I’ve recently heard stories about several friends whose email accounts have been hijacked. The hijackers then contacted people in their address book, claiming to have been mugged while on vacation overseas. Could you please wire money to me, the scammer asked? Be vigilant about your email password and be skeptical if you receive email or IM requests from friends asking for money. Follow up with them offline to confirm the request.

4. Computer crimes: This is a catch-all category that includes crimes targeting your computer or computer network, or crimes that attempt to use your computer or network to perpetrate other crimes. Take steps to secure your hardware, include password protection, firewalls and installation of spyware, anti-malware, anti-scamware and anti-virus software. If you’re not comfortable installing these, ask a trusted friend or technology professional to safeguard your computers.

5. Miscellaneous fraud: These crimes include work-at-home scams, fake contests and sweepstakes, and crimes intended to defraud people.

6. Advance fee fraud: There are a number of variations on advance fee fraud, but they all ask people to pay an upfront fee to receive something of value. Once the fee is paid, the fraudster disappears, leaving you with a lighter wallet but nothing to show for it.

7. Spam: Those bulk, unsolicited emails that fill up your in-box aren’t just annoying. Many are fraudulent, trying to direct you to overpriced or useless merchandise, hijack your computer or steal your personal information. The best advice: Don’t click on links from unknown senders, and beware if someone you know sends you a suspicious email. (A friend recently had his email account hijacked and used to spam his address book. I thought it strange that he was sending me—a platonic female friend—a link to a Viagra site.)

8. Auction fraud: There are any number of crimes being committed on auction sites, even the most legitimate. If you’re a seller, beware of people who want to overpay for items, send you more money than the cost of the item then ask for a refund, or ask you to ship items to Africa even though the purchaser is a US user. As a buyer, only purchase from sellers with few or no negative complaints. Don’t buy from sellers who typically sell inexpensive items, but suddenly start selling high-priced items. Think twice before buying from sellers who insist on checks, wire transfers or payment services other than PayPal.

9. Credit card fraud: This is another category that can include a variety of scams. It can include overcharging you for items you legitimately purchased as well as unauthorized credit card charges. Remember that as a consumer, you have more legal protections when using a credit card than a debit card. Also, review your credit card statements each month to ensure that they’re accurate, and contact your credit card issuer immediately if you think you’ve been overcharged or if an unauthorized charge appears on your statement.

10. Overpayment fraud: Has someone purchased something from you online, then tried to overpay, suggesting you simply refund them the difference? In my case, I sold a computer on eBay. The buyer wanted me to ship it out of the country and sent me a generous payment via PayPal, asking me to simply refund the difference after I knew the actual shipping cost. The only hitch: The PayPal payment notification was a fake and the eBay account was hijacked. If I’d fallen for the scam, I would have lost my computer and handed cash to the criminal in the process. Alarm bells should immediately go off any time someone overpays you—and don’t assume you’re in the clear just because your bank cashed the check. They can still come after you to recoup the money once they discover it’s a bogus check.

Tips to Avoid Being Scammmed:

ADon’t be greedy. If a stranger contacts you offering money, think twice.

BBe skeptical. If you get an email from a friend or stranger that strikes you as odd, ask some questions.

CEducate yourself. Learn the basics of computer safety and online security. Can you tell a secure website from an unsecure one? Do you know what Verisign is? The more you know, the safer you’ll be.

What to Do If You Feel You Have Been Scammed

1. Tell your bank. …

2.  Check your credit report. …

3.  Register with Cifas. …

4. Speak to Action Fraud Your bank should always be your first port of call if you think you have been scammed, but it is also worth calling Action Fraud for more guidance.

In Conclusion

With every generation, there is a thing to fear, a proverbial “boogyman.” or a thing or person, you need to lookout for.  As a child, it was stranger danger, a strange who could bring harm to you. Today its internet preditiors. These type of individuals, mode of operation is to pretend to be or act like, normal people. However with their narcissistic personalitie, they only cares for and about money, which involves, hurting people. Moreover they will do any and everything not to be exposed. So they continue to work in the dark and live in the shadows. 

Internet Scammers are like those kids when we were youngsters, that pushed to get ahead of the line and bullied you for your lunch money.  The only way that we handled these types as children, is to expose them for the frauds that they are, and put them in detention. That’s the way we should handle this bully adult, by exposing them in media and giving them detention, in JAIL!!!